This was such a great story - I loved reading it. You have such a creative mind and you're an awesome story teller! The details are fantastic, the adjectives you've used as well as the descriptions really helped me to picture the events unfolding. Great use out punctuation too! Try go back, reread it and edit any mistakes you might have made. We will be using your story as an example in this weeks mahi. Awesome work, Brendon!
Another great story Brendon, you certainly have a very vivid imagination which is super helpful when you write stories. Good work yet again, what are you going to write next?
Great work, Brendon. I still can't view your book. Maybe we can check it out via Google Meet sometime?
ReplyDeleteThis was such a great story - I loved reading it. You have such a creative mind and you're an awesome story teller! The details are fantastic, the adjectives you've used as well as the descriptions really helped me to picture the events unfolding. Great use out punctuation too! Try go back, reread it and edit any mistakes you might have made. We will be using your story as an example in this weeks mahi. Awesome work, Brendon!
ReplyDeleteAnother great story Brendon, you certainly have a very vivid imagination which is super helpful when you write stories. Good work yet again, what are you going to write next?
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